[Reading] ➲ Beast World ➺ Ramon Quintanilla – Larringtonlifecoaching.co.uk

Beast World In A Future Earth Ruled By Beasts, There Stands One Human Kingdom, Struggling To Survive Against All Odds Firestone Castle Is The Only Human Stronghold Left In A World Dominated By Aggressive Humanoids Bent On Its Destruction Winged Generals And Reptilian Lords Surround The Home Of The Goldenheart King, In Hopes Of Destroying Him And Ending His BloodlineAt The Edge Of The Green River Valley, King Manson Benevolent Defends His Fortress With His Faithful Soldiers At His Side The Threat Of The Enemy Grows, But His Resolve Grows With It, As There Is A New Member In The Family Of The Royal Human Remnant An Infant Girl Is Born, The Princess Athedra As She Draws Her First Breath, Athedra S Enemies Are Already At Her Gates, Vying Desperately To Destroy Her Yet She Is Not Alone, As There Are Many Willing To Die To Defend The Hope Of Mankind Above All Her Protectors Is One Who Was Born To Give His Life For Her He Is A Fighter Of Unequalled Strength And Virtue He Is The Guardian Shadow A Sword Wielding Monk Sworn To Protect The Princess With His Very Life Who Will Win This Savage Competition The Nations Of Reptilian And Feline Warriors, Which Strive For Yet Power, Or The Dwindling Group Of Humans, Which Struggles Only To Survive Sink Into Intrigue As You Discover A New World A Dangerous World A Beast World

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  1. says:

    I went back and forth whether or not I should review BEAST WORLD by Ramon Quintanilla Primarily because I just couldn t finish it and organizing my thoughts on what to say has been a difficult chore Also after trying my hand at writing fiction years ago, I have a great deal of respect for the effort authors put into a novel.Ultimately though, I had to concede that the point of reviewing is for the readers, not the writers, and as a reviewer trying to establish myself, what good would it do if I went back and forth whether or not I should review BEAST WORLD by Ramon Quintanilla Primarily because I just couldn t finish it and organizing my thoughts on what to say has been a difficult chore Also after trying my hand at writing fiction years ago, I have a great deal of respect for the effort authors put into a novel.Ultimately though, I had to concede that the point of reviewing is for the readers, not the writers, and as a reviewer trying to establish myself, what good would it do if I only talked about the good books I found.The basic premise of BEAST WORLD sounded interesting to me It s a different take on a post apocalyptic world, where human genetic experimentation has created a number of different species Lizard people, bird people, etc are now constantly at war with each other while humans are littlethan a foot note among these greater kingdoms Humanity does have one last bastion called Firestone Castle where a Princess Athedra is born and our hero, a monk travels to protect her.Now before I go on, I have to give credit where credit is due So far as I got, this book is line edited well, I don t think I ran into any grammatical, punctuation, or spelling errors It was also formatted well and I thought the cover was fine, so it passes all of my professionalism requests.However beyond that I found a lot of problems I actually attempted to read BEAST WORLD twice, I couldn t get into it the first time, so I stopped, read an old favorite, then read my last review and tried again When I couldn t get into it again, I went about trying to analyze why.NOW PLEASE KEEP IN MIND THAT THESE ARE OPINIONS FORMED ADMITTEDLY, WITHOUT FINISHING THE BOOK I came to determine, that in my opinion there are several major issues with the writing itself There doesn t seem to be any strong point of view sometimes there s no POV at all I noticed several tense slips, flowing between present and past tenses, and I can t be sure, but it didn t feel like the author was doing these on purpose And so far as I read, it is ALL tell and no show.Let me expand upon the last issue, because it is by far the largest problem In the prologue we re given a quick history of how this world came to be the way it is, an overview of the present state and wars and then a run down, one by one detailing the features of each of the beast races It reads without any point of view, like a text book or report Why does the reader need all this up front Why can t we go along and discover these creatures as we go In chapter one there is plenty of telling again We meet Ziophan the MC s trainer master and Seven our MC Who is a ten year old boy who we are told, repeatedly how great of a warrior he is If an author wants a reader to think a character is a badass, it s generally best to show him or her being a badass and let the reader come to the natural conclusion that they are indeed a badass You don t need to berate them over the head with lines like He has known no other thing but to eat, sleep, and fight, and by now, the child is a master wielder of tremendous violence There is no grown man that can defeat Seven s sword, or that can hide from his aim Later when we are shown the child is a badass it s done in a kind of off screen telling sort of a way with a credibility straining fight his trainer sets up between him and 2 armed lizard men, that he dispatches with his bare hands in a laughably easy fashion If there wasdescription I could say it read like anime, but really there isn t enough visual description for that So in the scene where we re almost shown that the child is a badass, instead of making me feel like he s tough, it instead made me wonder If a trained 10 year old can mop the floor with these creatures so easily, why are humans on the losing end of these wars again Dialog was another issue as it was nearly non existent I believe I probably could count every line of dialog in the prologue and first 3 chapters on my fingers No, I m not some mutated freak, I only have 10 fingers So what I ended up doing was skimming through paragraphs looking for a spot where the story started to shine or some meaningful dialog would take place, unfortunately every time I thought I had found something I discovered it turned intoback story andtelling,murky POV references andtense slips until I finally just called it quits 150to 50 Professionalism Cover Formatting Editing 50 Tribbles 100to 150 Characterizations 0 Tribbles 100to 150 Plot Pace 50 Tribbles 100to 150 Writing Prose 25 TribblesTotal 125 TribblesA free copy was provided for review

  2. says:

    This was one of those books I really wanted to like, and in a few places I did But they were a little far between.I will start with the good, and the things that kept me reading this book to the end Firstly the idea and plot behind this book were really quite good and the author obviously knew what he was doing in terms of world building In essence all the elements of the story were fine The big problem with this book is the execution of it.There is a lot of telling in the book and not much This was one of those books I really wanted to like, and in a few places I did But they were a little far between.I will start with the good, and the things that kept me reading this book to the end Firstly the idea and plot behind this book were really quite good and the author obviously knew what he was doing in terms of world building In essence all the elements of the story were fine The big problem with this book is the execution of it.There is a lot of telling in the book and not much dialogue on top of that there are paragraphs and paragraphs of description, often a lot of it repetitive I also found the time jumps hard to handle Several years would pass but other than the ages of the characters changing I felt this was entirely arbitrary It didn t need to span so many years and could have just had an older main character to begin with, especially as in the chapters where she is meant to only be two she seems to think and talk like a ten year old Despite not really enjoying this book I actually hope the author continues to write They have shown plenty of talent in the key areas, they just need to practice the craft of writing a good story and then publish books

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